Here are my two entries:
Begin with the breath:
lungs squirm down the rabbit hole-
hollow rasping snared.
Caged birdie flushing--
Beak flaps and taps rusted pipes-
Superbowl Shuffle.
I hope the images explain the author's intent. I wrote these with metallic noise in mind, not sound.
Haiku Monday will get me blogging again. And the theme for this week was so timely.
ReplyDeleteGee, I rather enjoyed Madonna's show
ReplyDeleteAnd as Stephen Corbert would insist, it is your right to do so. As for moi, she made me want to escape into the vortex of doom.
ReplyDeleteThe iron lung looks like the kind of prop Lady Gaga might like! I thought the theme was good this week too -glad if it gets you blogging again.
ReplyDeleteI am glad to be a part of this, as it puts me back into the poetic frame of mine. I never did many haikus except as a way to kill some time. I was fascinated by the links from Boxer and Seredepity (sp) about the structure within haiku. I didn't know that at all. I was going to try to employ it, but it just wasn't happening. I think I need to read more haiku to get that sense of procedure. I love reading the haiku (or is it a plural with an s) of all the participants. Clearly haiku belongs in nature, and I'm such a city girl who sees nature as more internal as the external is concrete aberration.
ReplyDeleteSusan B,
ReplyDeleteGlad you joined us. Haiku is rather a kick, and this crowd is quite fun because of the diversity and humor. It appealed to me at first because it forces you to tell a story with so little. Then It got to be a challenge to try to understand how haiku is really supposed to be written. Either way it is fun to try to respond to a theme.
Welcome.
Serendipity
So, if the Eagles made it to the Superbowl, would Madonna sound less metallic?
ReplyDeleteOr is that an old Simon and Garfunkel tune, "The Sound of Metal"?
This ain't metallic but made me visit your blog:
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